Willie,
I thought you listed some good insights from the guest speaker that you could have talked about further. I liked how in your first paragraph you connected with some of the things the speaker said when your grandfather died. However, the assignment was to write three paragraphs addressing the insights you got from the speaker and your own thoughts /connections regarding them. I definitely think you could have expanded on your thoughts and made further connections by writing more about your experiences with illness or death. You were off to a good start.
I thought you listed some good insights from the guest speaker that you could have talked about further. I liked how in your first paragraph you connected with some of the things the speaker said when your grandfather died. However, the assignment was to write three paragraphs addressing the insights you got from the speaker and your own thoughts /connections regarding them. I definitely think you could have expanded on your thoughts and made further connections by writing more about your experiences with illness or death. You were off to a good start.
Willie,
I thnk you did a good job with connections. Connecting it to personal life is always a good way to help the reader understand what the author might be going through. Especially for someone that has never read this book. Maybe you could try like more connections. Like connections to you, or to the world or to another book you have read. Maybe put more of your opnion in there along with the facts. I liked how you gave facts so we can get a better interpretation of the book. You did a good job. Also maybe try some predictions on what you think this could lead to in life, and why this could be happeneing. Good job thought
I thnk you did a good job with connections. Connecting it to personal life is always a good way to help the reader understand what the author might be going through. Especially for someone that has never read this book. Maybe you could try like more connections. Like connections to you, or to the world or to another book you have read. Maybe put more of your opnion in there along with the facts. I liked how you gave facts so we can get a better interpretation of the book. You did a good job. Also maybe try some predictions on what you think this could lead to in life, and why this could be happeneing. Good job thought
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